Typophile

Feedback for letter integration please

reshma

Hello, I am Reshma Shaik. I am interested in graphic design and a beginner in this field.
I have attempted a letter integration of my initials R and S. With the capital letters I found it too disconnected in the form to integrate but the moment I shifted to small letters, I found a couple of directions to try it in.
I would really appreciate if you could take some time out and give me feedback on how to improve this further.

Thank You

Reshma Shaik

I like it (more so, R and S being my initials too ;-)

I think you could lower a little the left part of r.
Also, I would remove the serifs (or make them more prominent).

You need to lower the top of the stem of r. Right now it's the same level as the top of the s and so optically it looks even higher.

@riccard0, Justin_Ch: Thank you for the feedback. Will work on it soon.

It might do well to decrease the size of the smaller circle by a very small percent.

The obvious problem with the swash to me is that its lower terminating point is much sharper than the upper. And the negative space/outline on the top does not actually match the curve of the filled portion. Make sense?

Sorry for taking long to fix it. But I made some changes based on the suggestions. Please take a look at them and let me know if the form seems more refined. Thank You for your time.

Could you maybe connect the bottom ball with the part of the 's'? It would make sense for the 'r' to have a ball and then the 's' to have one of his own as well.

Those serifs could easily follow the shape of the ball terminal. The r arm is a bit heavy, and it’s curves needs some more attention.

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