First one looks like giant teeth are biting into the text, and second has a road running through it. You had a version with just typographic "bridges" in the text. That worked better than these.

Trajan is better; that lower one has some awkward glyphs, especially that e at the end.

You had a version with just typographic "bridges" in the text. That worked better than these.

I thought the same thing at first Tomi, but it looks like that was a different student in the same class — judging by the URL, at BYU.

None of these are working yet. Don't get caught up in the details of rendering bridges. Get a solid concept first. Try working with the other part of the word: 'Mind'.

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