Seriously? Tell me it sucks, tell me you hate it, tell me you are overwhelmed with indifference.... Anyone? Bueller?

I like the feel of this! Interesting design.
Just remember that those sharp corners and points, and details like the top of the "t", will not come out as sharp (and not exactly the same anyway) in a tattoo – and then continue to blur for the rest of the subject's life. How large is this going to be?
Depending on intended size, I'd say don't be too "sophisticated" in the micro details. Like, I might strengthen the crossbars of the "t"s, and not let the top left of "i" and "t" taper into a point, but make it a bit blunter.

Does the "i" need more overshoot on the x-line?
Also, the tittle looks a bit shy and awkward rather than full of intent to me.

Funny with the ball terminal on the "e", but you might want to fiddle some more with it, its rotation and oblong-ity seems a bit uncomfortable. Have you tried a lachrymal?
The "e" might also look like it's leaning forward? (But I haven't had enough coffee.)

I agree that a teardrop terminal on the e is worth trying; that letter's thins jump out a bit.

Thanks for your feedback. I've tried a lachrymal and also tweaked the ball terminal to fit more with the letter shape.

I'm going to wait and talk to the tattooist before thickening up the corners and thin strokes.