This looks nice! I'm so into that swash on the d.
The first thing I notice is how straight and mechanical the underlines are. They are perfect and flat while the type is flowing and slants up a little (look at the space below the rs).
The two minor things I also notice are the fine line on the stem of the L looks a little thick and not quite right yet. And the bottom of the d, where the stem turns into the tail, looks a little heavy. It might be nice to play with making the thin upstroke of the bowl build into the stem.
Nice work.

Nice work Charles.

Michael
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