flyer crit

toby131 Oct 2008

Hi everyone,
This is an idea for one side of a flyer I'm working on.
I'm not happy about the three lines of text starting with 'To celebrate 5..'

Could anyone give any advice about how to set that better?
many thanks

Frode Bo Helland31 Oct 2008#

Those three lines of black text in the bottom right needs to be left aligned or at lest spaced better. I got your concept, but I'm bugged by the lack of space between REDHOTISGETTINGHOTTER. Have you considered something like "Hot, hotter, red"?

aluminum31 Oct 2008#

I'd like to see it at:

REDHOT
ISGETTING
HOTTER

With 'ISGETTING' scalled to fit the width of the layout.

Katharina31 Oct 2008#

The black colour seems very harsh next to the other ones. - Have you considered using a wider typeface to fill the space better?

eliason31 Oct 2008#

If nothing else, spelling out "five" could help even up the wordspacing...

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