Here is comp for tri-fold brochure (one of two tri-folder to be designed) This would be cover image.

Here is old brochure covers

I'm not quite sure what you are wanting a crit for. Is this a done deal already, or is it still evolving. To bad they you can't just loose the bird.

The space between the Y and A is to tight. Why is the word guide in purple. The purple seems a little dull in relation to the black. I dig the type face. It seems like the logo needs to be bolder, or if not bolder smaller.

Second choice for cover. In this version logo type was not yet developed . I used Peter Bilak's Fedra Sans.

Ole, the only thing I would look into for your comp is (not a rug pattern) but a rug texture behind your graphics. Its a little cold and austeer. As for the old brochures: Tacky use of drop shadows and squooshing of Tiffany is just disgusting.

Hey Sorry Ole, when I posted my message all I could see was the top logo and brochure. I couldn't see the old versions. You really made some changes for the better. I do like the top first cover over the second.

Hi Tiffany.
Version.1-The Zoraster character has to be part of it and I was not allowed to simplify it/ or re-render it as vector.
Version.2-I think you have a point about the lines. I took them from other comps (not shown), but I think you are right-not needed. Background is dark brown not black (perhaps poor color compression for web post). A redish tone brown would properly be even nicer. Thanks for the critique.

Ole, frisson-inducing stuff, as usual. :-) Really warm, but deep, not mushy.
But I wonder why the curvy "Y" wasn't chosen - it fits so well to me.

The lines: I actually think they make sense in the context of rugs, but maybe make them slightly "shaky", organic (and thicker), instead of totally rigid.

> Tiffany doesn't like to be squooshed very often.

But it's the ultimate wedding font!! ;-)

hhp

Ole, I prefer comp #1 for the brochure, but the Zoroaster character really bothers me. It either needs to be the full width of the logotype or set as a watermark along the length of the brochure.

Also, I don't understand the significance of the spot colour on "Guide"

Black is too hard colour for hand made stuff my grandmothers do. Their work is always soft and warm, black is always used to express suffering and struggle in contrast with other colours.
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My 2 cents:
The 2 A's look overdesigned, and remind me of the anarchic A's of the heavy-metal ages. WHy don't you try to keep the curly crossbar (and maybe make it subtler) but raise it's right end so that it intersects the right stem of the first A a bit higher?

Also, if you plan to use rounded shapes as design elements, I think you should soften a bit the letter shapes (look at British Airways logo and Mylius font).

Futher explanation and responses to posts.
Arya wanted to modernise and synchronize their identity witout modifying the Zoraster icon they already use. As I discovered once I got started was that the sacred geometry and symbology associated with the character could not be modified, as there was a reason for everything in it. Although I would have liked to re-render it in vector for userbility and refinement I was discouraged to do so by client.

The comps shown were really my first attempt at this to show client some direction. I banged this out the same night after our initial brief 10 minute meeting.
The next day when we had a real meetiung scheduled I was surprised to discover client liked it all as is (top version).
In some strange way disappointing as I like many other typophiles really enjoy the refinement aspect of a project like this.

One issue is that we are doing mostly trade, and what was not determined was $ exchange in our short 10 min. meeting. I trust this client because of the referral, so I went ahead with comps as shown.
So what now? Well I have approval and exchange negotiated, so I will continue with content.

I agree the "A"s aret not perfect (btw I enjoyed your comment about heavy metal Marius-I can see where you how you see the associated, at least if the type is isolated).
Black is to stark-" It always expresses suffering and struggle" I don't agree, Pirates always seemed to be having a good time-just kidding, anyway in final version they will be a warm dark reddish black/maroon.

About spot color on "Guide" - just a comp to show client what we could use. It will be solid-thanks Chase a good observation.
I does lokk a bit off.

A word of advice. Trades can be nice but be careful-it is not a good practise to get in the habit of doing so, especially if you have a sales rep.

Yeah. Tiffany doesn't like to be squooshed very often. Hehe. ;)

Version 1: Is the little character part of the logo at all? If not I think it is unnecessary.

Version 2: I think the lines are superfluous and remove from the organic other-wordliness of the rest of the design. I wonder if instead of black you use another red/brown color?