It reads pretty well. The main source of the "discombobulated" aspect is probably the lowercase n/e, which creates a mismatched double letter. See if you can rework it into a capital E, matching the I/E as much as you can. Also, I think you can make the L/G clearer both ways by attaching the bottom loop of the L at the bottom end instead, then making it much bigger for the g counter.

Awesome feedback; thanks! I'm having trouble understanding what you mean about the L/G though. Here's a newer version.

Excellent polish; it's looking great now.
Here's quick scribble of what I was thinking of, keeping in mind I may be wrong about it:

I'm having trouble reading that as an L, I'm afraid. But I agree there's probably a better solution for that combination - how does this strike you?

Very clever indeed, and and it adds a lot of visual appeal.