I like the interaction between the overlapping Cs on the left, but it feels to me that the lines of text are being swallowed

To me, your definition is competing with the large overlapping Cs. Because they (the big Cs) create a wonderful, lively shape that dominates the format, perhaps your definition could be something more subdued and orderly for more contrast. You’ve got big to small, now maybe try chaos to order (but always allow one to dominate).

I think I would lose the gray and work only with black and white. Only reintroduce the gray if you really need it.

It’s very nice overall. You’re a much better student than I was…

-Addison

What kind of design course inflicts Arial on the students?

Thanks to all for your input. I got some good ideas and interesting directions to look at.

@Darrell: The kind of teacher that tells us his experience of design school consisted of staying up all night to make a design “perfect” simply to avoid the wrath of his Prof. And on other days, to have the same prof snatch student work off the board during crtiques and expediently shred it before all to see, saving the world from yet another horrificly designed catastrophe. It’s pay back time I guess >

do you by chance go to university of cincinnati — my wife and i endured many a public hangings there during design critiques.

as far as the fonts go good luck — i think you have a great design. if you’re feeling devilish then you may want to do the definition in a bold script to really blow his mind.