The deconstructed version is too difficult to read. The formal version doesn't do anything for me--it looks like the letters are all from similar, but different typefaces. The lowercase a looks awkward to me.
Neither conveys tragic hero to me, but I don't think any typeface could do that. I think that is more of the graphic design side.
At least you didn't rely on a cheesy Star Wars/Sci-Fi font.
Keep trying.
