George,
this looks good, the forms are very lively. I like the 'g' a lot
I'd alter the top of the 'e' as it looks as if its leaning to the right a little, and adjust the baseline/x-height overshoot of the rounded forms such as 'o' 'e' etc. At the moment they appear to float above the baseline. Similarly the alignment of certain letters to the x-height is a bit variable, see for example the 'ng' and 'wn' combinations. The terminal of the 'j' could benefit from an approach closer, but not identical, to what you've done with the 'y' as it seems a little unsure of itself at the moment
hope this is of some use
I think the finished article will make for very comfortable reading.